The characters’ personalities are expressed awesomely. The taboos are an intriguing plot point. So far, the entire story is absorbing and has rhythm.
what is her hand? Instead of a written explanation, could you answer that by drawing a detailed picture of her hand (and eye)? This way, if you were planning on intertwining an explanation of her hand (and eye) into the story, you won’t spoil that now.
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The characters’ personalities are expressed awesomely. The taboos are an intriguing plot point. So far, the entire story is absorbing and has rhythm.
what is her hand? Instead of a written explanation, could you answer that by drawing a detailed picture of her hand (and eye)? This way, if you were planning on intertwining an explanation of her hand (and eye) into the story, you won’t spoil that now.
Thanks so much!
I’m not sure how much this will really tell you, but here you go!
To make it a little more clear, I’ve gone outside the usual style. Hope you can read the notes!